Draft 2: rewritten script, with real pauses
- C · Bram on Qwen + Holden, paced, with music
66 s. A beat after “That's my fault”, about a second of picture before the voice at each new scene, and a music-only moment when the rain stops and the trainer arrives.
The script
- Gus Mom, I know your shoulder hurts after our walks.
- Gus That's my fault.
- Gus Last week, I nearly pulled you off the curb.
- Gus I pull because it works. I pull, and I get to all the good smells.
- Gus You bought me a new harness. I pulled in that one too.
- Gus And when you pull back, I just pull harder.
- (the rain stops, the music turns)
- Gus Then a trainer from Dog Academy came to our house.
- Gus She came on our walk, and showed you one simple thing.
- Gus When the leash goes tight, you stop. You just wait.
- Gus So I come back to you. Pulling doesn't get me anywhere now.
- Gus Now we walk side by side. And you finish your coffee while it's still hot.
- Holden Dog Academy has served over 80,000 owners and pets. Get your custom training plan today, built around your dog.
- Gus Tap Book Now, Mom. I'll be good.
Draft 1 reads (no pauses)
- A · Bram on Qwen (your pick)
50 s. Gus directed as a sheepish cartoon dog; Holden reads the Dog Academy line.
- B · Evan on ElevenLabs v4
44 s. One continuous v4 read, Holden reads the Dog Academy line.
Draft 1 script
- Mom, I'm the reason your shoulder hurts after every walk.
- Last week I yanked you off the curb. You almost went down.
- I pull because it works. I pull, I get to the hydrant.
- You bought a new harness. I pull in that one too.
- You yank me back. Now it's tug of war, and I'm stronger.
- Then a Dog Academy trainer came to our house, and walked our street with you.
- She showed you one thing. When the leash goes tight, you stop. Pulling stopped getting me anywhere.
- Now I walk next to you. You can hold your coffee again.
- Narrator: Dog Academy has served over 80,000 owners and pets. Get your custom training plan today, built for your dog.
- Tap Book Now, Mom.
The original nine voices (one line each)
- 1. HoldenElevenLabs
The CHL narrator you called perfect. Deep, middle-aged.
- 2. HoldenMiniMax
Same voice, a different engine.
- 3. MilesElevenLabs
Young and bright, high pitched.
- 4. DylanElevenLabs
Young adult, mid pitch.
- 5. EvanElevenLabs v4 (newest)
Young adult, the newer, more expressive ElevenLabs model.
- 6. BramMiniMax
Young, energetic. Slower read (5.9 s).
- 7. BramQwen, with acting direction
Told to read it as a sweet, sheepish cartoon dog confessing to his mom.
- 8. CodyByteDance Seed Speech
Very high, kid-like. Says “Mum” (British).
- 9. MilesByteDance Seed Audio
Cuts off the last word (“wa-”). Would need a retake.